Opening paragraph
introduce ideas
Possible thesis: “A balance between industry and the environment has to be found, one that is able to counteract the effects of deforestation, while still providing economic opportunities to the community.”
segue into need for reforestation
Need for reforestation
soil degredation
erosion
biodiversity issues
Economic causes for deforestation
Low income areas
in tropics, wood is used for energy
Search for valuable hardwoods
agriculture (cattle ranching and farming)
Mining
segue into solutions
economic compromises
sustainable forestry
example in Indonesia
Amuesha Indians
Updated Works Cited
Britt, Dorian. "Environmental effects of deforestation; The facts." Environmental Effects of Deforestation. Google sites. Web. 7 Feb. 2010.
Butler, Rhett A. "Erosion and its Effects." Mongabay.com. 18 Feb. 2009. Web. 30 Jan. 2010.
Camhi, Ashley L. "Reforestation: Challenges and Opportunities." Mongabay.com. 23 Nov. 2009. Web. 06 Feb. 2010.
"Deforestation." National Geographic. Web. 26 Jan. 2010.
Freedman, Bill. "Deforestation- Causes of Deforestation." Web. 21 Feb. 2010.
Lavigne, Martin-Pierre, Alain N. Rousseau, Richard Turcotte, Anne-Marie Laroche, Jean-Pierre Fortin, and Jean-Pierre Villeneuve. "Validation and Use of a Semidistributed Hydrological Modeling System to Predict Short-Term Effects of Clear-Cutting on a Watershed Hydrological Regime." Earth Interactions Vol. 8.1 (2004): 1-19. EBSCOhost. Web. 26 Jan. 2010.
"Reduced Impact Logging." Mongabay.com. Web. 21 Feb. 2010.
Stock, Joslyn. "The Choice: Doomsday or Arbor Day." Deforestation. 1998. 23 May 2007. Web. 7 Feb. 2010.
"Sustainable logging to solve deforestation." DFID. Web. 21 Feb. 2010.
Toothman, Jessika. "Can we replant the planet's rainforests?." 23 June 2008. Web. 07 February 2010. HowStuffWorks.com.
Your thesis is really well written and strong. It does a nice job explaining your stance on the situation. Your outline was little vague so it was hard to understand exactly what information you will share in each paragraph, however once you write the essay I am sure you will be able to elaborate and it won't be a problem. Overall I found your thesis which is the most important part to be extremely strong. Your sources also seem legitimate, I just glanced at them but you definitely have plenty. Good Job!
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